Using DRAFT In Our Writing

LI: To write a stretched sentence.

Who- The Little boy,

What-The Little boy, tripped on a rock

When- The Little boy, tripped on a rock at night

Where-The Little boy, tripped on a rock at night on his way to the bank.

Why- The Little Boy, tripped on a rock at night on his way to the bank because he was running from his shadow

Original Sentence

As the fog rised, The little boy, tripped on a rock at night on his way to the bank because he was running from his own shadow

DRAFT Version

As the fog rose, the Little boy, stumbled on a rock at night on his way to the bank because he was chased by his shadow.

This is my stretched sentence, we had to write a sentence using Who, What, When, Where and Why. Then we had to proof read using draft. (Delete, Rearrange, Add, Fix and Talk. I then changed the sentence and got the DRAFT version!