Dialogue DLO.

For writing we are focusing on Speech Marks. I made this DLO to show how to use them and what other words you can use instead of using said. That is called a synonym, for example you can have big and call it Gigantic, or like me you can call it Prodigious! I had a lot of fun experimenting with new words and ways to make dialogue in storys or novels interesting.

5 Minute Recount W Sylis.

It was cold, my feet at the surface of the sea. There was no hope at all, Then out of the blue I saw a helicopter. My heart raced, I tried my best to swim up. “We are coming just stay calm” Yelled a man from the, A rope then lowered and someone grabbed me, “Was I gonna be saved” I asked myself. I felt my heart drop, the sudden beat as if it was going to explode! I felt as if I was not going to survive, Then I fell asleep. I could faintly hear my father yelling, “You can’t let him go….”. I woke up in the hospital with my family near by. Grabbing a hold of my mums hand, I felt as if I was surrounded by light. I was fine, I was safe.

For writing we had to sit back to back and write a 5 minute recount. I worked with Sylis, we had a lot of fun describing ways of drowning. Our story is about a boy stuck at sea, in the current and he passes out and goes into death's row.

6 Sentence Quick Writes

Today I have written these quick write story's about the Loch Ness monster and a creepy creature. The reason we wrote these story's was to practice writing narratives for next terms writing assessments.

Tongan Language Week Pourquoi Story.

How The Ngatu Came To Tonga.

Somewhere, some place, beyond the Seven Seas Captain Cook and his crew set off towards a village in Tonga.

We could all hear the ships, we knew there was a war. Mum and I kept back at hope whilst Fefe and Afa ran out. “Fefe you're the oldest so I don’t want you or your brother getting killed!” demanded the mum.

“Yes mum, Afa better listen or i’ll push him into the battle!”

“Don’t be nonsensical, now get your spears and stay safe, I’m counting on you boys to be our villages heroes!!” replied the mum.

Fefe and Afa ran out their puny little house. “Get down..” English men fired their guns, they all wondered who these new type of people were! “THEY HAVE GUNS!” yelled Afa. All the men kept reloading their muskets, Afa and Fefe had a plan. They figured out  how long it took the men to reload. The brothers and the tribe strategized ways to avoid the bullets by studying the soldiers movements. They could see immense bags lined up against the piles of dirt! They had men operating the cannons from the ships and soldiers down on the beach. Afa noticed that some men had swords, that easily meant they could annihilate them. “Fefe, let's move forward!”

“What, no you’ll get us killed!”

“Hey Fefe, whats that colored thing in the bag over there?”

“What that cloth?” replied Fefe.

They began to see things that their village had never experienced before, an artifact! An english man ran up to them, Fefe plunged his spear smashing against him repeatedly. Fefe and Afa felt their adrenaline pumping, nothing like this has never happened in their village.

“Fefe, i’m going to run up to them!”

“No…” Afa then pulled himself up from the dirt and began approaching the english men. It was too late to get him, Afa had already sealed his fate. The guns got fervorous, Fefe knew that mum couldn't live without Afa. Sadly he was gone...

Fefe remembered what their plan was, he started drawing in the sand. “Where are the rest of them?” inquired Captain Cook.

Fefe dived into the luminous water, he could see the ships. Than out of nowhere a man grabbed Fefe, Fefe tried breaking the man’s grip. The water was clear enough to see, Fefe punched the man, smashing him down. Fefe reached down, *Gurgle*  

Bullets plunged through the water, Fefe had reached the ship! “Well, well, well who do we have here?”

“I am here for that artifact in your bag!”

The men were all amazed that Fefe could speak english. Fefe had learnt english when gifted a magical rock, giving him that ability.

Fefe kicked a guard, pulling out his spear. The men formed a circle surrounding Fefe. Captain Cook watched from the top of the ship. Fefe smashed his spear, the force jabbing through the man.

In the end Fefe and his tribe managed to annihilate the crew. Captain Cook began to flee the village, leaving the bags behind. Fefe and the tribe charged towards the ship. Days later the tribe had reached a little place called Hawai’i. The Tongans and Hawaiians kept hidden whilst Captain cook and the rest of his crew came aboard. Fefe could see the men walking slowly, loading their muskets. One man heard a branch snap, he shot! The tribe ambushed the men.

They began fighting. Fefe grabbed hold of Cook, the soldiers spread out rotting on the corpulent sand. Captain Cook was then killed on the 14th in 1779. Fefe and his family were famous for what they did. Fefe found the cloth and that's how Tonga discovered the Ngatu, just like Cook discovered Tonga.

Making peace towards family and representing your people. There is a fine line between bravery and recklessness, and recklessness is not a good thing!

This is my story I made for Tongan language week, It is a mythical story about a boy called Fefe who helps his villages tribe to victory.  A pourquoi story is a mythical made up story to tell how something came to tonga! 

Magic Box Poem.

I will put into the box...

The shavings of ice percolating down the airy sides.

Heat from the fiery forces encompassing within the four walls.

A pinch of spearmint stabbing acuminously against the fabricated surface.

A touch of love and forgiveness.

I will put into the box …

The wisdom of protection.

Shock of capability from the forces of obscurity.

And treasure dropped from the celestial spheres above.

I will put into the box …

The hate precipitating into a tenacious spot.

Letters of doubt fullness overflowing.

My box is fashioned from diamonds and gold and on the lid the wisdom which overtakes eternity.

Its hinges are fastened with the world's most finest leather which tells very decisive tales.

I shall put into box

A stone of devotion and infatuation.

A heart of of courage and salvation,

the hope of compassion.

This is my magic box poem. I had to think of descriptive language to put into this poem. I am happy with this poem and had lots of fun!

5 Minute Writing!

This is the tale of a very unpopular orangutan who gets lost in the Amazon rain forest! He was on a normal walk when suddenly he heard the trees falling and the branches snapping. The people who look after the animals, seiged to the rescue. They were helping the animals because a bulldozer was tearing apart the rain forest! They called their way to the bulldozer, "Stop, stop!" All the animals rushed but the orangutan ran so hard that he realized that there was no one and nothing near him. He ran into the plants and through the river. He went to have a drink, then a repugnant Parana jumped at him! He latched his hands onto the Parana massacring it. He then threw the dead Parana then a snake ate it up. Then he sees the bulldozer. He ran up to the bulldozer. He then threw the driver out of it and drove off! The lesson the driver learnt is to not destroy other peoples homes. Then the orangutan drove home and he lived happily ever after, until the snake ate the other snake, and the other snake ate the next snake and the next snake ate the orangutan! The End.

This is a story Lyndon and I have created! We had to take turns writing about an orangutan who gets lost in the Amazon rain forest! We wrote sentence by sentence and it was really fun! We thought it would be really funny to end it off with a snake who eats the other snake who then eats the next snake and the next snake eats the orangutan!

Shipwrecked: Story.

Today I wrote a story about a nerdy inventor who is shipwrecked on a desert island. I went onto a website called Story Starters. I spun the wheel and it came up with a nerdy inventor who is shipwrecked on a desert island! When I had my idea I wrote the story!

Young Authors Challenge Story: Kick Off.

Kick Off!

He walks onto the field. As his foot hits the ground muddy water bursts up his legs! He calls to his teammates. The whistle goes. Fast paced men run towards him, the ball smashing against their boots. “Goal!” the crowd roars as the ball passes the out stretched goalie.

“Hey did you catch that game last night?” asked Mike.

“Yeah, I reckon one day I’ll be like Messi, you know fast, strong, good at football!” replied Axel.

“You’ll never be like him, no one will!”  

Axel had that saying in his head the whole night! You’ll never be like him, no one will. The next day Axel asked his teacher if he could join the soccer club. “Training starts tonight!”

Axel set up his gear. “There's a new Messi in school!” He walked over to the field and Mike was training! “Could this day get any worse?”

“Hey little Axel decided to come play soccer!”

“Who said I can’t?” queried Axel.

The more Mike kept saying those things, the more Axel wanted to play.

Later That Day…

“Hey honey how was your day?”

Axel didn’t reply. He walked up to his room and slammed the door. “Maybe Mike is right. Maybe I am hopeless. Maybe I’ll never play soccer!”

“Son, want to come watch the game with me?” asked his dad.

“OMG!” yelled Axel.

The next day Axel decided to grab a ball and practice his skills he would need if he wanted to join the team. He practiced for hours, he even propped his ipad on a seat so he could learn the miraculous and prodigious skills and tricks that Messi could do! It took him about 3 weeks to master juggling the ball 3 times, and he thought he was hopeless, well really he was!  Afterall his mum and dad had watched him fail for hours.

Than finally he did it, he could juggle, dribble and much more, he was ready!   

Weeks later he stood up and walked onto the field for his first day of polished and professional training. Mike was there laughing with his mates. “I bet he can’t even score a goal!” he muttered to his friend. Axel ran home, and found all his life savings. He went online and bought a small soccer goal. When it arrived he got his ball and two pairs of shoes.

Why, you ask? Well if he put the shoes in different places near the goal he could practice dribbling the ball passed the shoes like they were other players! And the idea actually worked! The next day he had a big match! “3 2 1 Go!” The game had started.

Axel was playing against Mike so he wanted to play the best he could. He had the ball, he now knew that passing the ball is the right thing to do, so he kicked it up towards the strikers who are the two people who play up front. One of the players was then injured but the game still went on. Axel ran up front with the ball. “Come on Axel you can do this!” he muttered to himself. He thought and when he got near the goal he passed it to his team mate and turned his back. The teammate passed it back and Axel flipped himself around  kicking the ball straight into the goal.  That soccer move, ladies and gentlemen, is known as the Bicycle!

“Can’t score a goal aye?” as he walked passed  Mike. Mike was speechless, surprised with his mouth wide open.

The one thing that Axel learnt is that you never give up on a dream, because one day it might just come true!

This is my entry for the 2016 Young Authors Challenge. It is about a boy named Axel, who struggles to play soccer, but he practices and finally he plays. He also faced playing against his mortal enemy, (worst person he knows) and eventually he shows him who can really play.

The Golden Girl Story.

The Golden Girl:

Rebecca quickly shut her eyes, the bright light covered by her eyelids.  He proceeds, sprinting towards her. She screamed and he got closer and closer. She ran towards a cliff side, and down the bottom was a lake. She wept. He got even closer. She jumped! A few minutes later she swam to shore and he disappeared! “Whew!” she sighed with relief.

Rebecca rapidly opened her eyes, wiping the water away. She ran through the woods. She lost her breath. She sprinted. She now knows he found her.

She woke up. Couldn’t see. She reached into her pocket. “Where’s my phone?” She questioned. She couldn’t see whether he was still there. Her eyes blinked. They opened. Her arm was so stiff she couldn’t feel the rope bashing against her. She saw a knife on top of a barrel.

Rebecca wonders where she is. She kicked the barrel and the knife was released. She cut her way out. There he was on the veranda. “I must be in a barn.” She told herself. She smashed through the hay bale. Tackling the man to the rusty floor. She jumped off.

*Smash* the shock, as she landed on the ground, was like she had walked on a wet cable. He followed. “You're going nowhere!” He roared like a lion. Her ground shock disappeared. She than bolted over to a telephone box. She huffed her way to the phone. She rang her parents.

“Dad! Dad! I’m in the middle of the woods can you do anything to find me?”

“Hun, what are you on about? Where are you.” Her dad questioned.

“I'm not that sure I think i’m around the old village campsite (Aspen, Colorado) ,please come, there's this man chasing me! Oh and I think he has: black shoes, muddy t-shirt and these ugly pants, like jeans. ”

“Dad dad...” *Bang* Glass shattered.

“Ugly pants aye?” He asked her.

She slowly turned her head. She saw a glimpse reflection off the booth mirror of the man with a gun. “What will I do?” As she muttered to herself.

Rebecca clenched her hands together. He loaded the gun and put his finger on the trigger. She twisted herself around like a wind up toy. Grabbed the gun and stopped.

“Go ahead, shoot me, be like me,  A murderer, a kidnapper. It all starts like that.” He said.

“No it doesn’t.” She yelled.

“Oh yes it does, one miniscule pull of the trigger and bang, you're an instant murderer.”

“I’m not a murderer, I’ll never be!” She declared.

She jumped at the man pushing him to the ground, a long piece of glass passaged through his leg. She wanted to do more (Kill Him!); she didn’t.

He couldn’t feel his leg. She heard sirens. “Dad.” as she ran towards her father. She looked up to the horizon as she was in shock, the sun back in her eyes. She heard the police officer yelling. “In the name of the law, remain silent. They arrested the man.

Days later the Herald published an article telling Rebecca’s shocking story. A constant flow of reporters all seemed to want to know the same thing. Maybe that is what sold papers...

This term we have been learning to write narratives. We used the picture prompt below to help us imagine how this situation came about. We tried to hook our audience in by thinking about the pace of events and the pictures we painted with words.

Writing Prompt Continuation.

On the street, day time. Legs run along the pavement. They are Mark Renton's. Just ahead of him is Spud. They both belting along. As they travel, various objects, (pens, tapes, CD's, toiletries, ties, sunglasses and so on) either fall or a discarded from inside their jackets. They are pursued by two hard looking store detectives in identical uniforms. The men are fast, but Renton and Spud maintain their lead. Suddenly as Renton crosses the road, a car skids to a halt inches from him. In a moment of detachment Renton stops and looks at the shocked driver, then at Spud, who has continued running, then at the two men who are closing in. He smiles.

                                            

                                            Continuation

Spud kept on sprinting. Mark then drops his wallet, Spud stops. 

"Mark move on!" 

Mark runs back. Spud then goes. He sprints, hurdling the chairs and shoving pedestrians. 

"Spud wait up!" Mark cried. The police were behind them but Spud doesn't have a care in the world. "Spud when we get away from here were splitting the money!" he yelled back as he turned the corner. The officers split up. 

"Ya better be good at free running!" yelled Spud. He jumped up the wall and stopped! A siren went off. Mark knew there were more officers. 

"Spud don't go that way!" Mark screamed. Spud didn't listen. Rocks went flying from all the little street thugs. The police stopped them. Spud tripped on a rock and they stopped him. 

"No..." cried Mark. 

"You Have The Right To Remain Silent!"

I have continued on from a part of the movie Train Spotting. We had to write it at a fast pace which matched the part above!

Using DRAFT In Our Writing

LI: To write a stretched sentence.

Who- The Little boy,

What-The Little boy, tripped on a rock

When- The Little boy, tripped on a rock at night

Where-The Little boy, tripped on a rock at night on his way to the bank.

Why- The Little Boy, tripped on a rock at night on his way to the bank because he was running from his shadow

Original Sentence

As the fog rised, The little boy, tripped on a rock at night on his way to the bank because he was running from his own shadow

DRAFT Version

As the fog rose, the Little boy, stumbled on a rock at night on his way to the bank because he was chased by his shadow.

This is my stretched sentence, we had to write a sentence using Who, What, When, Where and Why. Then we had to proof read using draft. (Delete, Rearrange, Add, Fix and Talk. I then changed the sentence and got the DRAFT version!

Stretching Sentences

This is the Stretching Sentences that John and I collaboratively made. This is about using the 5 W's and stretching sentences to make them longer, have more detail, expands the sentence and makes it more interesting.

What is problem solving in maths? Does it only happen in maths.

Today we had to write a quick write of what we know about problem solving and if it only happens in maths? This is my quick write!

Problem solving is developing maths knowledge! It is not just used in maths for example (Buying things at the shop, Finding how much you get payed in pocket money and much more!)

Problem solving can be figuring out the answer, working with bigger numbers and using different strategies! Problem solving helps you work out solutions in maths.

But when you're using problem solving outside of maths it could help with a lot of things. I think it’s not just used in maths but it's used outside of it too!

Our trip to the Botanical Gardens.

At the Botanical Gardens we went past a vegetable and plant garden. There was mint and apple mint, the apple mint smelt fantastic. There was also parsley lavender and lettuce but we did not get to try them we only got to smell them.

 The lavender puts you to sleep so I tried to smell it for a long time but it did not work.

The apple mint reminded me of the extra chewing gum, then we had to move on but I did not want to because I enjoined doing that and I wished I had had more time to be there. 

Monday quick writes.

If I was invisible for 1 day I would be able to not be seen and scare people like I am a ghost and make them think I am one. I have all ways wanted to be invisible and I can do things with out people knowing.

I have seen super hero's and have always wanted be invisible and I wonder what it will be like to be invisible,I would like to have a cloak like harry potter and spy on people That do not know I am there.

It won't be nice if the day was over and the ability to be invisible was over I would probably fell sad and embraced if I was spying and someone found me.   

Eastern beach.

We all came to school yesterday morning I felt exited. We all lined up for the bus, then we got off and saw another school that had taken our spot so we had to go to the other side of the beach.When I saw the water it reminded me about piha  because of how ruff the water was. 

First we had morning tea and then the juniors had a swim. While room 7 went and made sand castles. Then it was our tern to have a swim. The water was not cold for me. My mum helped me do back flips under water and I was good at it.There was a current in the water but it was fun.



When I got out I was hungry and I also remembered about five plus a day of fruit and vegetables and I had more then five.Then my dad arrived so we had the whole family there. 

My outside template brochure of the school production.

This is my outside template brochure on the school production. In the production I am Aoraki Mt Cook.

My holiday story by Latham.

In the holidays I went to mini golf, to the movies to watch Despicable Me 2 and emailed Miss Paton in Chicago. She even emailed me back and wanted my address to sent me postcards and that felt amazing emailing her from another country.

In her email she told me that she saw the Niagara Falls, went to the aquarium

and went to hawaii, I forgot what else was in the email but it sounded fun! I then caught up with cousins and got to try a lolly that I have always wanted to try. It was the new Natural Confectionary lollies.  They were a little bit sour but tasted like smoothies I had Mcdonalds and at Mcdonalds I also ate the biggest burger!

After I tried the lollies I went to a restaurant called Yum Cha which is a chinese restaurant. Then we went to Sylvia Park to celebrate my dad's birthday he turned 38. That was my biggest part of the holidays celebrating my Dad’s birthday and that is my amazing holiday story. By Latham   
   

Week 8 quiz results.

This is week 8 quiz results some got 100% and some got 40%.

My speech:should we have a science lab Latham.

Should we have a Science Lab?

I want our school to have a Science Lab.

We need a Science area at our school so that we can

learn how to blow  stuff up safely and use electricity. We can get a uniform made out of a strong material like steel  but not steel because  steel attracts electricity and that would shock you to death.

If you get too crazy with science you could do some damage to the school. If we have a science lab, we should only have 4 to 6 students at a time doing experiments so that it is safe.

Maybe we could get an old car that does not go and try to make it work again by getting the motor and pumping in electricity to try bring it back to life.

This week I went to the Science Road Show to learn about science and how it works which I really loved. This man showed us how to make cottage cheese. You have to get a cup of milk and some vinegar and then you stir it up. You get this kind of thick stuff called curds and whey which you pour through a cloth and what you are left with is cheese. I think this is really cool.  

Labs are used for scientific research, in the 18th century there was a chemistry lab used by Antoine Lavoisier. In  1901 Thomas Edison came up with the light bulb and he also had a lab to experiment in. Joseph Swan and Hiram Stevens Maxim also invented the light bulb.

Research tells us that one of the good things about having science labs in primary schools is that  the students get to see what is happening, which makes it more interesting for them to learn about Science instead of just reading about it. Learning comes alive for students learning is hands on, seeing is believing.

I found a report on the internet  which showed me that out of 119 primary school students 87%  enjoyed doing a science experiment with other students, 9% were not sure, and only 4% did not enjoy doing the science experiment.

The study showed me that the students achieved a better  understanding about Science when they did the experiment themselves.

I really enjoy doing  Science experiments and I hope that we get to do it more often at school.

I hope you enjoyed my speech.